Portable Multimedia Player: Memory of my high school
I have a PMP that is special for me. When I look at my PMP, then I can remember my high school life. When I was a freshman in high school, my parents bought and gave it to me. I got a "T43" I-station PMP. It was a black and has silver line. There are 3 to 4 inches screen in the center of the PMP, and it has some buttons on the right side. In the back side, it has a battery. Both sides of PMP are equipped with USB ports for PC and charging. During my high school life, I was used to using my PMP for my study and I also using it for watching dramas or movies. I use my PMP very carefully and after my high school graduation, I gave it to my younger brother. When my parents gave it to me, I was happy because it was new model in that time, and I can use PMP in many ways. And now, my brother will use my PMP for his study. My younger brother will use my PMP and he will take very good care of my PMP. Because he'll use it during his school life and he really need it to his study.
Portable Multimedia Player: Memory of my high school
ReplyDeleteI have a PMP that is special for me. When I look at my PMP, then I can remember my high school life. When I was a freshman in high school, my parents bought and gave it to me. I got a "T43" I-station PMP. It was a black and has silver line. There are 3 to 4 inches screen in the center of the PMP, and it has some buttons on the right side. In the back side, it has a battery. Both sides of PMP are equipped with USB ports for PC and charging. During my high school life, I was used to using my PMP for my study that I used EBS online-lectures to preparing KSAT(Korean Scholastic Aptitude Test) and I also using it for watching Korean dramas or movies. I use my PMP very carefully and after my high school graduation, I gave it to my younger brother who is the 8th grade now. When my parents gave it to me, I was happy because it was new model in that time, and I can use PMP in many ways. And now, my brother will use my PMP for his study. My younger brother will use my PMP and he will take very good care of my PMP. Because he'll use it during his school life and he really need it to his study.
Minju Yeo
ReplyDelete1. Does the paragraph have a topic sentence? Can you identify the possession the writer will describe?
Yes. "I have a PMP that is special for me."
2. Does the writer provide background information about the possession? If so, write it here.
Yes. He got the PMP when he was a freshman in highschool.
3. Does the paragraph have enough descriptive details to make the description clear to the reader?
When describing about the PMP's appearance, he did describe it well enough.
4. He said 'black and silver line' which made me imagine the appearance. What could be improved about his writing is that he needs to explain 'why' the PMP is so special for him, except than reminding of him his high shcool days.
5. It doesn't have any concluding sentence. You should write a topic sentence that restate the topic sentence in the end.