Since I was in highschool, I've never had a television in my house. It was my dad's idea to put it away.
At first, I was not so happy with the decision. However, I feel more comfortable about it now. It is true that TV has
been a good 'friend' for people all over the world since it was invented. Some people say these days they can't live
without it. I agree that TV is sure a great invention and helped our society to develop and be convinient. However, I doubt if
it is a necessary and essential thing in our life. First of all, TV programs are so diverse and entertaining these days
that people spend a lot of time watching it. Sometimes they just watch TV for killing time, even though they have nothing
to watch. I didn't want to do this since I have many things to do other than watching TV, and killing my precious time.
So now I thank my dad that he did the right thing for me. If I really have to, or want to watch TV programs, there are so
many internet websites that allows people to watch the programs again. I usually use those websites to watch TV programs
that are really necessary for me. I think it saves me a lot of time. In conclusion, I don't think TV is a really necessary thing
in my life, and I surely could live with out it.
At first, I was not so happy with the decision. However, I feel more comfortable about it now. It is true that TV has
been a good 'friend' for people all over the world since it was invented. Some people say these days they can't live
without it. I agree that TV is sure a great invention and helped our society to develop and be convinient. However, I doubt if
it is a necessary and essential thing in our life. First of all, TV programs are so diverse and entertaining these days
that people spend a lot of time watching it. Sometimes they just watch TV for killing time, even though they have nothing
to watch. I didn't want to do this since I have many things to do other than watching TV, and killing my precious time.
So now I thank my dad that he did the right thing for me. If I really have to, or want to watch TV programs, there are so
many internet websites that allows people to watch the programs again. I usually use those websites to watch TV programs
that are really necessary for me. I think it saves me a lot of time. In conclusion, I don't think TV is a really necessary thing
in my life, and I surely could live with out it.
Thank you for the writing.
ReplyDeleteThe writing was very interesting to read.
It was a wonderful idea to relate your own
personal experience with the idea you had on TV.
As one of the members to oppose watching TV, I can not agree more with your dad.
It is definite that TV influence the way people
perceive each other and them selves, and it's definitely not in a positive way.
Watching too much TV can lead to health probelms, and it prevents people from developing well socially.
I think you made out your point very well.
The overall choices of words and the detailed statements that show the flow of your thoughts
really impresses me.
However, I think it would have been better, if you described the last part of the sentence more clearly.
As for me, I'm against all of the parts of TV. This includes show which broadcasted through television.
The breif metion on your widened selection of TV programms by means of internet, doesn't relly go well with your overall writing.
There is not much difference in watching TV show by TV and on the internet. Since the consequences are same, I guess there is not much of a difference.
In breif, your writing would have been much better if you kept your coherences with the writing from the very start and to the end.
Thank you.
Hi. I'm Lee Myungjae. I like your writing in that the opening is related to the ending-your father's decision of throwing TV away. Recognizing that your feeling on TV has changed along with your father's opinion, I feel the sense of strong persuasion. Your main point seems that TV is not necessary to live because we can easily waste time by watching it too much, and there are other ways to get similar information. In particular, I like you pointing out that some people just watch TV for killing time, which I also think is not wise at all. However, I wonder what you exactly mean in your saying that TV helped our society to develop and be convenient. I am curious which aspect of TV made the world develop or people comfortable. Also, TV program being diverse and entertaining is not harmful itself. The matter is increasing people being losing control of watching TV. So, if you stress the later more(instead of the word 'sometimes'), your point will be clearer. To sum up, with adding some sensible reasons for your opinion and changing some words, your writing will be more persuasive. Thank you:)
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