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KIM JI SU
major : DIS
title: my life until now
Hi. My name is Kim Ji Su, and I'm 21 years old. I was born in a hospital which was located right next to the house where I've been living for more than 10 years. I transferred to the country when I was in my elementary school years due to my dad's job movement. My dad is a tax accountant and he is really good at handling numbers and math. It looks like I resemble my mother side of the family, since I hate math. My favorite subjects have always been languages. I love learning languages, because learning each of the language enables me to have the ability to communicate with the country's native people. I studied languages since the age of 8. Now I can speak Korean, English, Chinese and a little bit of Spanish. I'm a very optimistic person, and I try to enjoy life itself because life is short. I'm very satisfied with my current life, because I have a lovely boyfriend who is always taking care of me and my school colleagues are wonderful. I'm enjoying my life of the 20's and I'm planning to keep my life joyful all the time.
I like your story, but I think you need more transitional words between your ideas.
ReplyDeleteHi Ji Su! I'm Minkyong Sohn and this is my feedback on your writing.
ReplyDeleteI liked your writing because it showed how your life has been generally.You really wrote about your life until now. Sentences are neat and easy to follow. I think your writing would've been better if you had used one strong idea/topic in your writing.
Thanks!Have a nice day!!
TV, could you live without it?
ReplyDeleteTV is the most widespread appliances every home may have. Despite the fact that TV has appeared only several decades ago, it has already been a common word in our lives. Some children even say, “Watching television is my hobby.” This shows that TV has deeply rooted itself to our daily lives. However, I still strongly believe in that, people will still manage to live well without the presence of television. Moreover, life without television will be beneficial than the one with it. First, watching television is an activity that requires little or no interaction. Watching television is the most passive activity that you could think of. Your eyes are glued to television and no thinking is involved during the process. So, as soon as TV disappears, people will start looking for activities that requires more movement and interaction. Also for the sake of the children, watching TV should be lessened, since television draws children away from the family. According to a study, conducted by University of Washington, children watch TV an average of four hours a day. This leaves little time for conversation with family. This not only reduces the “family time” but stunts the social growth, conversational skills. From various aspects, TV leaves nothing but ill effects to our lives. There is no doubt that we can live without TV, and to increase our standards of well being, I think it’s essential to remove TV from our lives.
My life
ReplyDeleteHi. My name is Kim Ji Su, and I'm 21 years old. I was born in a hospital which was located right next to the house where I've been living for more than 10 years. I transferred to the country when I was in my elementary school years due to my dad's job movement. My dad is a tax accountant and he is really good at handling numbers and math. It looks like I resemble my mother side of the family, since I hate math. My favorite subjects have always been languages. I love learning languages, because learning each of the language enables me to have the ability to communicate with the country's native people. I studied languages since the age of 8. Now I can speak Korean, English, Chinese and a little bit of Spanish. I'm a very optimistic person, and I try to enjoy life itself because life is short. I'm very satisfied with my current life, because I have a lovely boyfriend who is always taking care of me and my school colleagues are wonderful. I'm enjoying my life of the 20's and I'm planning to keep my life joyful all the time.