English Education
201102779 Tak-gyun Lee Since I was very young, TV occupied most of my free time. From the soap operas I watched in the late night, and gag shows which beat my boring weekends, to documentaries which allowed me to cover all kinds of stories, watching TV was the best way to kill my spare time. At that time I could not find anything which could replace TV. Of course, I could watch TV through Internet or other resources, but I was too young to utilize them. That led me to giving up another channel while I was watching the other, and waiting until the program reran once I missed it. So I had to sit down before TV every week, at same time. Being a high school student, however, I didn't have enough time to watch TV. Nevertheless, I downloaded some programs through Internet. Then, I was old enough to use the 'Internet' thing. At that time, I realized that using Internet means being able to watch what you want to watch while watching TV means having to watch what the broadcasting station plays on that time. Thanks to this convenience, I started to use computer to watch TV and my time spent on watching TV has decreased a lot. Now, I'm living in the Globeedorm, where there is no TV. But I don't have any inconvenience so far. My leisure time has been replaced by reading books or writing something. Sometimes when I can't concentrate on what I should be doing, I turn on my computer and download some interesting programs. Also, I can watch famous shows whenever I want to. In conclusion, I can live without TV because there are many other things which can substitute for it with more convenience.
Hi, Tak-gyun. Here is my comment on your writing. First, on your writing, I could recognized how the society has changed so technically. Mentioning the way watching TV programs has changed helped support your opinion on the topic. Also, I liked that there were details on your writing. But some of them were unnecessary, I think. For example, you didn't need to mention the fact that you are old enough to use Internet. People know that you can because you said you download TV programs from it. So it would be better reduce unnecessary ones and make the writing brief. See you in class, bye :)
ReplyDeleteHello! This is Mi Jung. i enjoyed reading your essay. it was interesting to read how your attitude for TV had changed. However if you change some bits i guess the writing could become more easy to follow.
ReplyDeletefor example, when i first read your first sentence "Since I was very young, TV occupied most of my free time.", i thought that TV occupied most of your free time from childhood time to nowadays also. Because the 'since' also includes the meaning 'now'. That frustrated me a little.
i also found "From the soap operas I watched in the late night, and gag shows which beat my boring weekends, to documentaries which allowed me to cover all kinds of stories, watching TV was the best way to kill my spare time."this sentence a little bit too long. Maybe a full stop(.) after stories:)