My Thrilling Trip to London
When I was 17years old, I went to United Kingdom with my friend in summer vacation. We were so excited at that time because it was the first time to go abroad for both of us. But we didn't know that something terrible will happen to us until we went to London for our trip. When we were traveling in London, we could see a lot of interesting things. We visited Big Ben, London eye and Buckingham palace. We felt full of joy and happiness. When we decided to turn back to the hotel we stayed, we realized that something terrible happened. We lost our travel map! Not having a map meant that we can't go home. Because it was a first visit to London, we were strangers to here and don't know this neighborhood very well. We were lost! Our legs were shivering from top to the bottom and my face was as white as that of a corpse. We didn't have much money to use an expensive London taxi, and it was getting dark. We were so worried about this situation, but we didn't give up. We tried to ask the way to people. It was really hard to understand their explanation because our conversation skill wasn't so good. Anyway, we finally arrived in safety to the station. We had to use it to go back to hotel because it was getting dark and there was no time to walk. It was a first time to take a subway so we were very terrified to use it. But, we met a Korean guy who lived in London! He explained us how to go to our destination very kindly. We were so thankful to him. We could go back to our home safely. Although we were lost in London, and had trouble to go back to our hotel, we could see lots of wonderful architectures of London and met a very kind person. My trip to London was so exciting and thrilling. I would never forget about my trip.
Hi this is Kahee Lee.
ReplyDeletei think the main topic in you writing is the incident when you lost your travel map durin gyour trip in London.
I know how important a map can be when you are in a new place. I th ink the narrative writing is very good, I think it could be better if you wrote the first sentence as the topic sentence.
You wrote a good closure, I can see how you feel about your trip.
Hello, this is Takgyun.
ReplyDeleteYour main point seems to be the trouble you had when you were traveling in London.
You organized the event in time order well and gave us specific details about the situation.
Also, you add your feelings in the last. Thank you for sharing your paragraph and see you soon!