We prepare special gifts to celebrate special days. Also, we can express our thankfulness or apology through presents. When things are given as presents, they mean more than what they are. Now, let's imagine that we are choosing a special gift for someone you love. You should follow the steps to make a choice. First, you should decide the person to whom you give the present. Right object will help you choose right gifts and reduce unnecessary spendings. Next, you should find out what they need. It would be much better if you fill their needs with presents. Of course, as a person who receives the gifts, he or she cannot demand something as a gift. But they will be happier when they get something they have wanted or needed as presents. Also, when gifts are needless to them, it will be easily forgotten. Then, go shopping for the gifts. You can even make it. Gifts are to express your feelings. Hand-made gifts might be less delicate but better to show your heart. Finally, you can give the present you chose or made to the person you thought of. It's time for us to be happy by watching the other's happy face.
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ReplyDeleteI think your main point is that there are certain steps to choose a special gift. So I think your topic sen tence is “You should follow the steps to make a choice.” What I like about this paragraph is that I could understand the steps exactly. It was so correct and has a unity. So, I even wanted to use it when I choose my special gift for my friends and parents. But, I have a question in this writing. I thought that we have to write down the gift that we chose and the way we decided to buy it. It was mentioned at the top of the page 97. So I think that it would be better if you add your experience which you went through when you had to buy a gift. Also, there are some sentences which are hard to get it like “Of course, as a person who receives the gifts, he or she cannot demand something as a gift.” And “Also, when gifts are needless to them, it will be easily forgotten.” I think you should make these sentences easier or you can just erase those. I couldn’t catch the meaning of it.
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We prepare special gifts to celebrate special days. Also, we can express our thankfulness or apology through presents. When things are given as presents, they mean more than what they are. Now, let's imagine that we are choosing a special gift for someone you love. You should follow the steps to make a choice. First, you should decide the person to whom you give the present. Right object will help you choose right gifts and reduce unnecessary spendings. Next, you should find out what they need. It would be much better if you fill their needs with presents. Of course, it is tough for receivers to demand what he or she wants as a present. But they will be happier when they get something they have wanted or needed. Then, go shopping for the gifts. You can even make it. Gifts are to express your feelings. Hand-made gifts might be less delicate but better to show your heart. Finally, you can give the present you chose or made to the person you thought of. It's time for us to be happy by watching the other's happy face.
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