The know-how of wise shopping
It takes pretty much time for me to buy an item. It is not because I am indecisive but because I am very wise shopper, and there is my own know-how when I buy something.
First of all, you should make a list written by priority. Sometimes, when you go to the mall without having any list, we get so impulsive that buy what we do not need. And before going out and heading to the mall, you should sit down before the computer. Search the price of the item first. I recommend two sites; shopping.naver.com and café.naver.com/joonggonara. One of features of the former is that the site offers the comprehensive information from various sites. And that of the latter is pretty surprising; there are many sellers who upload what they want to sell. From cosmetics to furniture, there are tons of kinds of items, waiting a new owner with more affordable price. When you can't find what you want through this process so far, you need to leave. And there are two options. You can choose whether to go to the mall or to the outlet. If you want to up-to-date items, head to the mall. Otherwise, as I have, if you have an ability to pick the best item out of piled ones (probably and mostly they might be out-of-date), run to the outlet!
Shopping is sublime. If you need to buy something important, or economize the money, follow this steps I suggest. The beauty of shopping is not only to make you become prudent when spending your money, but also cherish what you get from the series of efforts.
Hi, I'm cho yoon jung from your class!
ReplyDeleteI can clearly identify your topic sentence as you mentioned in the first sentence.
But you didn't provide background information about the process.
I think this paragraph has some time order words like 'first of all', 'And'. I know this paragraph doesn't related to the exact time order but I think you could use more time order words.
I think the reason why this process is useful is mentioned in the bottom of the paragraph. But I can't quite get the sentence 'Shopping is sublime'.
I think the concluding setnence restates the main idea.
Thx for sharing the writig!
Hi, I am Yeonju!
ReplyDeleteThe topic is how to shop wisely, and you are keeping unity through this paragraph.
But I don't think you've really simulate the process. I could find the first step: making a list, checking those websites, but after than, there is not a conjunctions such as "next, second, then, finally, etc". As far as we were supposed to write a process paragraph, I think you should correct the paragraph to show a process in it.
Like our textbook says, try to use the conjunction and inperative sentences.
Thank you!
The know-how of wise shopping
ReplyDeleteI used to spend money on shopping indiscriminately, so I had difficult time to change my bad habit: going to shopping without to-buy-list, missing the chance to get the goods with cheaper price, and buying on the spot where I found that I like. After I changed, It takes pretty much time to buy an item. It is not because I am indecisive but because I am very wise shopper, and there is my own know-how when I buy something.
First of all, you should make a list written by priority. Sometimes, when you go to the mall without having any list, we get so impulsive that buy what we do not need.
And before going out and heading to the mall, you should sit down before the computer. Then search the price of the item first. I recommend two sites; shopping.naver.com and café.naver.com/joonggonara. One of features of the former is that the site offers the comprehensive information from various sites. And that of the latter is pretty surprising; there are many sellers who upload what they want to sell. From cosmetics to furniture, there are tons of kinds of items, waiting a new owner with more affordable price. When you can't find what you want through this process so far, you need to leave.
Here are two options. You can choose whether to go to the mall or to the outlet. If you want to up-to-date items, head to the mall. Otherwise, as I have, if you have an ability to pick the best item out of piled ones (probably and mostly they might be out-of-date), run to the outlet!
Shopping is sublime. If you need to buy something important, or economize the money, follow this steps I suggest. The beauty of shopping is not only to make you become prudent when spending your money, but also cherish what you get from the series of efforts.