In many Korean dramas, we can find many kinds of big families, in which all the relatives live together. And it has not been long since the notion of nuclear family was adopted in Korea. Koreans would live with relatives and that was common. Then, do you think living with relatives is a good idea? I think it is. As the size of family has been smaller, it has caused many problems. First of all, children raised in the nuclear family don't have many chances to learn how to deal with adults and peers at home. If you live with relatives, you have to confront many other grownups beside your parents even inside the house. That will help you internalize the right attitude toward adults which is very important for Koreans. Also, children nowadays don't know how to call their relatives. Different from English, there are tens of names used to call relatives in Korean. It is essential knowledge for Koreans. Children may learn about it without difficulties. Not only for children but adults also benefit from relatives living together. On every big holiday such as Seol and Chuseok, Koreans 'travel' the long way to get together with relatives. But living with them in a house will reduce the fatigue and tiresome. Relatives are just like family. Living with relatives are same as living with family, which is really natural. And with all those advantages, I think living with relatives is a good idea.
Hi, Takgyun. I'm yoon jung from your class!
ReplyDeleteI can clearly see the topic sentence is that the first sentence. Your writing is well-organized and easy to read. I think you used proper supporting sentences. But I think your supportig sentences can be improved by adding more experiences!
Thx for sharing your writing!