The Best City To Live In
In Ivory Coast, the best place to live is the city called Abidjan – the capital of the country. It's a city with two large beaches and there are palm trees along the roads. It has been called "Africa's Paris" by foreigners because it's really a beautiful city. For same reasons, this city has the perfect atmosphere to live. First, the transport system is very convenient. Unlike other cities of this country, there are owner-driver taxies and yellow taxies called woro-woro. Second, the climate is pleasant. Even if it's hot, there is the minimum of humidity and the sun shines brightly so I think it's the appropriate weather. There are the dry season and the rainy season but they aren't that long. There will be no problem if you stand two months of each season, or avoid these months to travel. In addition, there are beautiful hotels with vast golf-links and swimming places. We can sit on the benches which are in the gardens full of exotic flowers. Also, there is a cathedral called "The Cathedral of Yamoussoukro" which is known as the biggest one of the world. It's very unpopular but when seeing it, you could feel some divineness and great glory. I recommend you to go there and see it someday. Abidjan is the country's first city desired to live because it has beautiful places and convenient transportation. It could be the first choice to visit for foreigners too!
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Hi, This is Jae-hun Lee and this is my feedback for your writing.
ReplyDelete1.Does the paragraph have a topic sentence that expresses an opinion about the topic?
->Yes, In Ivory Coast, the best place to live is the city called Abidjan – the capital of the country.
2.Does the paragraph include any facts to support the writer’s opinion? What facts does it include?
->Yes. It has been called "Africa's Paris" by foreigners because it's really a beautiful city.
3.Does the writer provide explanations that support the opinion?
->Yes. Unlike other cities of this country, there are owner-driver taxies and yellow taxies called woro-woro.
4.Does the writer tell any experiences that support the opinion?
->Yes, there are beautiful hotels with vast golf-links and swimming places. We can sit on the benches which are in the gardens full of exotic flowers.
5.Does the paragraph have a concluding sentence that restates the writer’s opinion and comments on it in some way?
->Yes,Abidjan is the country's first city desired to live because it has beautiful places and convenient transportation. It could be the first choice to visit for foreigners too!
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