Policy and morality, I vote for them!
Since April 23rd, the registration for presidential contenders has been started. Thus, the political section of newspapers is full of articles of presidential contenders these days. What do you consider when you vote for president? There will be many factors. Among them, I consider two factors, candidate's policies and morality. First, I look into their policies and see whether they are clear and realizable. They also have to be concrete. Voters make much importance on policies because they show how the country would be during next several years. And in most cases, those are directly related to people's lives. Secondly, as corruption scandals implicating people close to the president has recently come to light, morality of a candidate became an important factor. Nation's trust on the president is crucial to his administration. If public opinion is inclined to distrust on the administration, the State will not be able to push forward the national project. Then this will lead to a regression of whole country. So we have to vote for someone who seems not to cause any moral issue. As the presidential election decides next five years of the country, people need to vote. And I will vote for the one who has realizable policies and strong moral character.
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ReplyDeleteI think your topic is about two factors voting for the candidates ; candidate's policies and morality. I also wrote about this topic and I share many similar opinions with you.
What I like about your writing is that you make clear topoic sentence and the conclluding sentence. I can easily see how your writing goes on.
But the part you mentioned about supporting details, I think it has to be more specific. You said the poliies are important because it relates to people, I think you should add some specific details more!
Anyway I'm glad you and I shared many things in common about this topic!
Thx for sharing your writing!
Your topic sentence looks like
ReplyDelete"Among them, I consider two factors, candidate's policies and morality."
I think this sentence controls rest of the writing very well.
Also I think you provided enough background information about your statement.
What I like about your writing is that you wrote your topic very clearly.
However I think more detailed examples would have been much better.
Also, you can add some concluding sentences in the last part of your writing to wrap it up.
and I think your title doesn't quite match with your thesis....
or topic.
Why don't you change your title more suited to the writing?
Thank you
Vote for a future
ReplyDeleteSince April 23rd, the registration for presidential contenders has been started. Thus, the political section of newspapers is full of articles of presidential contenders these days. What do you consider when you vote for president? There will be many factors. Among them, I consider two factors, candidate's policies and morality. First, I look into their policies and see whether they are clear and realizable. They also have to be concrete. Voters make much importance on policies because they show how the country would be during next several years. And in most cases, those are directly related to people's lives. For example, economy policies like FTA, it leads petty merchants and farmers hard to earn a living. Secondly, as corruption scandals implicating people close to the president has recently come to light, morality of a candidate became an important factor. Nation's trust on the president is crucial to his administration. If public opinion is inclined to distrust on the administration, the State will not be able to push forward the national project. Then this will lead to a regression of whole country. So we have to vote for someone who seems not to cause any moral issue. As the presidential election decides next five years of the country, people need to vote. And I will vote for the one who has realizable policies and strong moral character.