How bake a cheese cake.
Baking is very easy. It is unfortunate that most people consider baking is hard.
However it's really simple. Today I want to show you how to make a lovely delicious cheese cake, without an oven!
First, you need
A bag of cookies,
Plain yogurt,
Cream cheese,
Sugar,
And three eggs.
Second, smash some cookies in a bowl till there are no chunks left. This will become the very base of your cheese cake.
Put an egg into the smashed cookies and stir it. Don't do this with your bare hands, or you will feel the stickiness all thorough your body. So make sure you ware vinyl gloves.
Place the cookie though at the bottom of the rice pot.
Third, mix yogurt and cream cheese together. Put 3 spoons of sugar. Then mix it hard till the mixture becomes thick.
Then pour it all in the rice pot.
After putting all the materials in the rice pot, strike the pot several times in order to settle down the mixtures all together.
Finally, you can just press the button 'cooking'. Then the baking will be done by itself.
Wait for about 30 minutes.
Now you have a delicious homemade cheese cake.
Baking is easy!!
Hi, Ji Su! This is Jeong Hyen Joo! I really like your paragraph because I like a cheese cake! Maybe I can try to make it with your recipe.
ReplyDelete1. I think your topic sentence is “Today I want to show you how to make a lovely delicious cheese cake, without an oven!” So, I could realize that you will talk about some steps to make a cheese cake.
2. However, I’m not sure that there is a background information about why did you choose this topic in this writing. Maybe you want to let people know that baking is not hard. I think it will be better if you add a detailed reason why you choose a cheese cake to bake.
3. There are time order words in your paragraph like first, second, third, after, and finally. It was really helpful to read your paragraph because I was able to know the flow of steps.
4. I’m not sure you fully explained why this process is useful or necessary to other people. Because there are only two sentences at the bottom of your paragraph. Next time you revise your writing, it can be a good idea to add more detailed sentences.
5. I think your concluding sentence is “Baking is easy.” It might be better if you mention about a cheese cake:”Baking a cheese cake i s easy!” I think this sentence restates mor e about your main point.
Baking? No problem!!
ReplyDeleteBaking is very easy. It is unfortunate that most people consider baking is hard.
However it's really simple. Today I want to show you how to make a lovely delicious cheese cake, without an oven!
you need A bag of cookies, Plain yogurt, Cream cheese, Sugar, And three eggs.
Second, smash some cookies in a bowl till there are no chunks left. This will become the very base of your cheese cake.
Put an egg into the smashed cookies and stir it. Don't do this with your bare hands, or you will feel the stickiness all thorough your body. So make sure you ware vinyl gloves.
Place the cookie though at the bottom of the rice pot.
Third, mix yogurt and cream cheese together. Put 3 spoons of sugar. Then mix it hard till the mixture becomes thick.
Then pour it all in the rice pot.
After putting all the materials in the rice pot, strike the pot several times in order to settle down the mixtures all together.
Finally, you can just press the button 'cooking'. Then the baking will be done by itself.
Wait for about 30 minutes.
Now you have a delicious homemade cheese cake.
Baking is easy!!